E.g. TK 1,306, lines 2-18, in which the only change from SM 11,87-88 is 'this' (line 3) for 'that'.
2.
How Robert M. Adams estimates Kilmartin's total modifications at a probable average of "about three to five per page", I do not know (see Times Literary Supplement, no. 4080 (19 June 1981), 667).
3.
A good example is TK 1,373: the sentence beginning "Having told M. de Charlus..." now contains only four commas; the sentence it derives from contained ten (see SM 11,174).
4.
See especially TK i,434 for a version of Proust's "qui lui faisaient prendre autour de moi tant de place apparente sans qu'elle fût mêlée davantage a ma vie" (P 1,400), which lacks on SM 11,252; and TK 1,307 for a whole sentence missing from SM ii,89.
5.
E.g. TK 1,119 repeats SM i,149's "stable orders of society", despite footnote 2 on P i,110 which emended NRF's sociétés fermes into sociétés fermées; and TK 1,398, line 22, repeats SM ii,206, despite footnote 1 on P i,366.
6.
Cf. TK i,297, "so that...so that" in consecutive lines
7.
Cf. TK i,34, 37; SM i,40, 45; P i,32, 35.
8.
Cf. TK i,190, 354; SM i,239, ii,150; P i,174, 325.
9.
P i,257; SM ii,55; TK i,280.
10.
P i,90; SM i,120; TK i,97. Leconte de Lisle might even deserve a footnote in this role as translator, thus enlightening for the English-reader not only the identity of the person so obliquely referred to by Bloch but also the latter's Homeric speech-style
11.
See P i,208; SM i,286; TK i,226.
12.
See P i,391-3; SM ii,240-2; TK i,425-6. Cf. Charly Guyot, "Sur Ruskin et Proust", Revue de littérature comparée , xxi (1947), 56.
13.
Cf. SM ii,51 and TK i,278.
14.
Cf. SM i,7 and TK i,7. Did Mr Kilmartin ever consult such a work as Burnand, La vie quotidienne en France de 1870 à 1900 (Paris, 1947)? Which see, pp. 270-1.
15.
Cf. P i,36; SM i,46; TK i,38. Deriving from jus gentium, this 'droit des gens' is neither the "Rights of Man" nor the "rule of law", but, since Proust is here concerned with non-observance of a pacte, the 'law of nations' or 'international law', which concerns, among other things, the "obligation to observe treaties" (OED).
16.
See P i,168, 323. Allitération" looks like a misreading for alternation, which fits the sense and is given in Littré (although Proust does use alternance elsewhere); and "pointure" must surely be posture
17.
See P i,997 and TK i,1036. Cf. Painter, Marcel Proust (London , 1967), ii, 195 and 199.
18.
See P 1,160ff, 158 and 12, 341; SM i,221-2, 217 and 14, ii,172; TK i,175ff, 172 and 13, 371-2.
19.
However, Odette's "odeur" is still "her fragrance" (SM ii,28; TK i,260).
20.
21.
P i,22; SM i,22. Thus Moncrieff despite his own i,288 where he has Swann's "ignorance of music"
22.
P i,74-75; SM i,99.
23.
P i,403; SM ii,255.
24.
P i,369; SM ii,210.
25.
P i,368; SM ii,208.
26.
P i,365; SM ii,205.
27.
P i,38; SM i,49; TK i,41.
28.
P i,39; SM i,51; TK i,42. This "reflect", instead of the proper believe, travesties the character of the grandmother
29.
P i,30; SM i,38; TK i,32.
30.
P i,72; SM i,95; TK i,77.
31.
P i,28; SM i,35; TK i,30. Both translators have trouble, not only with jeune fille, but with fillette, rendering both of them at times as "little girl", which when applied to Gilberte (SM i,192, ii,244; TK i,153, 428) is ludicrous -fillette de quatorze ans, says the Petit Robert, and "jeune fille dans les premières années de I'adolescence", neither of which could be said about a "little girl"
32.
P i,7; SM i,6; TK i,7.
33.
P i,223; SM ii,7; TK i,244.
34.
P i,393; SM ii,242; TK i,426.
35.
P i, 163; SM i,244; TK i,178-9 (with one small change).
36.
P i,420; SM ii,278; TK i,455.
37.
P i,309; TK i,337.
38.
P i,133; TK i,145.
39.
P i,252; TK i,275.
40.
P i,373; TK i,405.
41.
P i,?05; TK i,223.
42.
P i,?48; TK i,?71.
43.
P i,391; TK i,425. Proust is deriving wable from viabilité; it appears in this sense (of praticable or carrossable) in the old 1934 blue edition of Mansion. What a "viable journey" might be, only Mr Kilmartin knows
44.
P i,388; TK i,421.
45.
Connolly, Enemies of Promise (London, 1938), 18; and The Bodley Head ford Mandox Ford (London, 1962), i,353.
46.
See "Proust Regained", London Review of Books (19 March-1 April 1981), 15.
47.
"A propos du 'style' de Flaubert", in Contre Sainte-Beuve (Pléiade, 1971), 586-7.
48.
Cf. P ii,835.
49.
P i,405; SM ii,258; TK i,439. My italics.
50.
E.g. SM i,115, 116; TK i,93, 94.
51.
52.
See for instance TK i,192-3 for a sequence of five sentences; three "Buts" on TK i,398-9; or the sequence of nine sentences on TK i,187-8 of which six begin with "And". All these derive direct from Moncrieff. Proust's initial Et can be difficult to deal with; but it must be possible to do better than this.
